Peer Review for Hyunkyung

Grade

According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
3점! 형식도 잘 맞췄고 confirmation이 매우 잘 짜여져 있음.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
충분히 잘 썼다. Conclusion이 좋다.

ThesisWhat is the thesis?
Internet's contribution to globalization is negative.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
네

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
딱히...

Any other thoughts?
no


Classical Argument

Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
다 있음
 
Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 네.

 Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
네.

 Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
네... 자료도 풍부하고 논리성이 뛰어남

 Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
네. 적절한 근거를 들어서 반박을 했고, 반대의 의견 역시 잘 찾았다.

 Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
네. 호소하는 느낌이라 매우 좋았다.

 What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?딱히... 다 잘했습니다

 Persuasion

When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
agree
 
When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
agree

 If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
no. 문장도 잘 썼고 내용도 탄탄하다.

 How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
딱히...



ResearchIs the author using research effectively? 
네 진짜 자료도 많고 신뢰성이 뛰어남.

Is the research from appropriate sources?
네 

Are the sources obvious?
네
 
Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
네

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
다 잘 한 것 같다. confirmation이랑 conclusion이 마음에 든다. 아 근데 사소하긴 하지만 첫 문단 시작할때 띄는 거랑 온점을 반점으로 고치면 외적으로도 깔끔해질 것 같다.